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發表於 2007-6-26 04:26:45
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Well, Star.. * [7 N( W3 f6 f
You have learnt some "bad" things... NO ENDING....0 c% k# X1 x3 \$ O: D
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You did well in the story, however, it seems you end the story in the wrong part...# D/ Q( `9 ~1 X
Usually, if you want to end the story for your reader with space..8 n8 |3 @" b% f" z8 l* a4 K2 A [
I think you need to add more "DETAILS" which will provide more guidelines to the utlimate ending..% \7 c' N6 F- D% Q \
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But anyway, it just my personal opinions.....
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, j; M4 G% B) f- t6 k- T# C5 \NICE WORK for sure... Keep it up... |
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